Question 1

Nikki needs to establish a more effective controlling idea in her paper. Which rewrite of sentence 8 can BEST accomplish this goal?

Accepted Answer

They work day and night to keep millions of air travelers safe.

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The air traffic controllers are important contributors to the scene.

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With so many planes in the sky, they are critical folks.

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The nation’s air traffic controllers have to sit in front of computer screens.

Question 2

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 13?

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Sentence 13 does not need to be revised.

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Controllers are on the ground which will let you know which runway to use and when it’s your turn to take off.

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Controllers on the ground will let you know which runway to use they’ll also let you know when it’s your turn to take off.

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Controllers on the ground will let you know which runway to use. And when it’s your turn to take off.

Question 3

Nikki would like to add a phrase to the beginning of sentence 14 to help transition from the third paragraph (sentences 9–13) to the fourth paragraph (sentences 14–17). Which of the following could Nikki add to the beginning of sentence 14 to achieve this goal?

Accepted Answer

Once your plane is in the air

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Before that

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Over and above all else

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With that in mind

Question 4

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 16 and 17?

Accepted Answer

As you move from one part of the country to another, you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another.

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You’ll move from one part of the country to another, you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another.

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You’ll move from one part of the country to another after you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another.

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However, you’ll move from one part of the country to another when you’ll be handed off from one regional control center to another.

Question 5

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

Accepted Answer

The first stop for these items is probably a materials recovery facility, or MRF, where the real recycling takes place.

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The first stop for these items is probably a materials recovery facility, where the real recycling takes place, an MRF.

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The first stop for these items is probably a materials recovery facility and an MRF, where the real recycling takes place.

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The first stop for these items is probably a materials recovery facility, an MRF, this is where the real recycling takes place.

Question 6

Miles would like to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 6–15). Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

Accepted Answer

After sentence 15

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After sentence 13

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After sentence 9

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After sentence 8

Question 7

Miles is concerned that there is a sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 16–22) that does not add anything to this paper. Which sentence should Miles delete from this paragraph?

Accepted Answer

Sentence 21

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Sentence 22

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Sentence 20

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Sentence 19

Question 8

Miles is not pleased with the way he ended his paper. He would like to delete sentences 28 and 29 and replace them with sentences that would bring the paper to a better close. Which of the following could BEST close this paper?

Accepted Answer

So if saving energy and conserving the environment are important to you, keep tossing your recyclables into a designated bin. Your efforts are making a difference.

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So starting today, learn about recycling centers. You’ll discover that this is a fascinating topic, and you’ll want to share what you learn with others.

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If you believe that you can make a difference in your city, then you should recycle. It’s a powerful way to make that difference you’re hoping for.

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Do you believe that recycling is the most important thing you could ever do? Take a look at the research if you disagree.

Question 9

In sentence 5, Nick has not offered a strong controlling idea, or thesis statement. Which revision of sentence 5 creates the most effective thesis for this paper?

Accepted Answer

More interesting, however, is how this little dog earned the rank of U.S. Army sergeant and became a war hero.

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More interesting, however, is how Stubby was able to keep the name for so very long.

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More interesting, however, is that Stubby was both unusual and popular during World War I.

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More interesting, however, is why everything about the scraggly little dog was stubby.

Question 10

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

Accepted Answer

While training on a Connecticut field, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

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He was training on a Connecticut field because he found a stray dog that won his heart.

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Training on a Connecticut field, a stray dog that he found won Conroy’s heart.

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He was training on a Connecticut field, there, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

Question 11

Nick would like to add a sentence to help with the transition between the fifth paragraph (sentences 21–28) and the sixth paragraph (sentences 29–32). Which sentence should Nick add to the beginning of the sixth paragraph, just before sentence 29?

Accepted Answer

After about 18 months, Sergeant Stubby and Conroy returned to the United States together.

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Although Stubby had been wounded, he was still a friendly, cheerful dog.

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Fortunately, the dog had earned a high rank during the war.

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It wasn’t long before Stubby was on the battlefields of Europe.

Question 12

Which idea could BEST follow and support sentence 34?

Accepted Answer

He became the mascot for the university’s football team, entertaining the crowd by pushing the ball around the field with his nose.

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He was the first dog to ever earn a rank in any branch of the U.S. armed forces.

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Georgetown University, located in Washington, D.C., was founded in 1789 and is a private institution.

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During his war service, Stubby was reported to be sensitive to even a small trace of gas.

Question 13

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

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The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, a shelter for homeless animals.

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The officers, who took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, had a shelter for homeless animals.

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The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary and a shelter for homeless animals.

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The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, this is a shelter for homeless animals.

Question 14

Joe wants to provide a better closing for the second paragraph (sentences 6–10). Which of these could be added after sentence 10 to more effectively close this paragraph?

Accepted Answer

At that moment the workers at the shelter knew that Jasmine was special.

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People thought Jasmine was a very strange and unique dog.

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The staff was afraid that Jasmine might accidentally harm the puppies.

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She took care of them as if she had given birth to them herself.

Question 15

Joe would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 14?

Accepted Answer

According to the staff, once Jasmine and the fawn met, they were inseparable.

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Clearly, the fawn was just a little baby at 11 weeks old.

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Jasmine preferred to take care of animals that were similar to her.

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Bunnies, badgers, guinea pigs, birds, and fawns—Jasmine cared for a strange mix of animals.

Question 16

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 15?

Accepted Answer

The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care.

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The animals at the sanctuary were comforted when Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care comforted them.

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The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, who had her loving presence and her gentle care.

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The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, her loving presence, and her gentle care.

Question 17

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 6?

Accepted Answer

Her name, which means “little girl” in a native Australian language, was first given to her father’s favorite crocodile.

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Her name was first given to her father’s favorite crocodile, it means “little girl” in a native Australian language.

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Since her name was first given to her father’s favorite crocodile, it means “little girl” in a native Australian language.

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First given to her father’s favorite crocodile, in a native Australian language, her name means “little girl.”

Question 18

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

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There she helped care for several animals, including Harriet, a giant Galápagos land tortoise.

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There she helped care for several animals and a giant Galápagos land tortoise.

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There she helped care for several animals, although one was Harriet, a giant Galápagos land tortoise.

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There she helped care for several animals, Harriet, a giant Galápagos land tortoise.

Question 19

Grace wants to end her paper with a quotation from Bindi Irwin. Which of these quotations could follow sentence 21 and most effectively close this paper?

Accepted Answer

“I don’t want to grow up in a world without wildlife,” insists Bindi. “My daddy was a wildlife warrior, and I’m going to continue his work.”

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“It’s interesting,” notes Bindi. “I really don’t look at myself as famous.”

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“We’re always working with the government and different organizations and just working at it slowly,” explains Bindi.

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“It’s nice to be able to talk to people and share your ways of dealing with things,” says Bindi.

Question 20

Derek would like to replace sentence 3 with a sentence that better states the controlling idea of his paper. Which of these would be the BEST replacement for sentence 3?

Accepted Answer

As a result, many animals have sleep patterns that help keep them safe.

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As a result, that means other animals can hurt them.

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As a result, animals don’t climb in bed and pull up the covers like humans do.

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As a result, many animals have to figure out a new way to fall asleep.

Question 21

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 6?

Accepted Answer

As one half of the animal’s brain enters a sleep state, the other half stays alert.

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One half of the animal’s brain enters a sleep state, the other half of the brain stays alert.

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As one half of the animal’s brain enters a sleep state, there is the other alert half of the animal’s brain.

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One half of the animal’s brain enters a sleep state, or the other half of the animal’s brain stays alert.

Question 22

Derek has included an extraneous sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 8–11). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

Accepted Answer

Sentence 11

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Sentence 10

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Sentence 8

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Sentence 9

Question 23

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 26?

Accepted Answer

What is certain, though, is that animals that do sleep have found some clever and unique ways to do so.

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What is certain, though, is that animals have found some clever ways to sleep that are unique ways, too.

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No revision is needed in this sentence.

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What is certain, though, is that animals that do sleep have found some clever ways to do so, they are also unique.

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