REVISING AND EDITING

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Then fill inthe answer on your answer document.

Jazlynn wrote the following paragraphs for a story about a family reunion. Read theparagraphs and look for corrections Jazlynn needs to make. Then answer thequestions that follow.(1) Parking the car near a pavilion at Metropolitan Centennial Park‚ Marta’sfather announced‚ “Welcome to the Esquivel family reunion!”(2) Marta grumbled‚ “Dad‚ it’s been a decade since we’ve seen these people.”(3) “You are going to have a magnificent time‚” replies her father. (4) “Yourcousin Juan will be there‚ and you used to play basketball for hours with him.”(5) “He probably won’t remember me; even if he does‚ we won’t haveanything to say to each other‚” Marta fretted. (6) She sighed as her father‚ who waswalking toward some older relatives, was greeted warmly with big hugs.(7) At last Marta captured a glimpse of Juan‚ who was wearing his Terra VistaMiddle School basketball jersey. (8) He saw Marta‚ and hesitantly tossed hisbasketball to her. (9) Reflecting‚ Marta thought‚ “It looks like we still have somethingin common.”

What change should be made in sentence 3?

Jazlynn wrote the following paragraphs for a story about a family reunion. Read the paragraphs and look for corrections Jazlynn needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) Parking the car near a pavilion at Metropolitan Centennial Park‚ Marta’sfather announced‚ “Welcome to the Esquivel family reunion!”(2) Marta grumbled‚ “Dad‚ it’s been a decade since we’ve seen these people.”(3) “You are going to have a magnificent time‚” replies her father. (4) “Yourcousin Juan will be there‚ and you used to play basketball for hours with him.”(5) “He probably won’t remember me; even if he does‚ we won’t haveanything to say to each other‚” Marta fretted. (6) She sighed as her father‚ who waswalking toward some older relatives, was greeted warmly with big hugs.(7) At last Marta captured a glimpse of Juan‚ who was wearing his Terra VistaMiddle School basketball jersey. (8) He saw Marta‚ and hesitantly tossed hisbasketball to her. (9) Reflecting‚ Marta thought‚ “It looks like we still have somethingin common.”

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?

Jazlynn wrote the following paragraphs for a story about a family reunion. 

(1) Parking the car near a pavilion at Metropolitan Centennial Park‚ Marta’sfather announced‚ “Welcome to the Esquivel family reunion!”(2) Marta grumbled‚ “Dad‚ it’s been a decade since we’ve seen these people.”(3) “You are going to have a magnificent time‚” replies her father. (4) “Yourcousin Juan will be there‚ and you used to play basketball for hours with him.”(5) “He probably won’t remember me; even if he does‚ we won’t haveanything to say to each other‚” Marta fretted. (6) She sighed as her father‚ who waswalking toward some older relatives, was greeted warmly with big hugs.(7) At last Marta captured a glimpse of Juan‚ who was wearing his Terra VistaMiddle School basketball jersey. (8) He saw Marta‚ and hesitantly tossed hisbasketball to her. (9) Reflecting‚ Marta thought‚ “It looks like we still have somethingin common.”

What is the correct way to write sentence 8?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

This paragraph is from Gena’s paper on the importance of voting. Read the paragraph and look for corrections Gena needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) Voting is the basis of American democracy. (2) After becoming registered voters, many people have exercised their right to vote in every election. (3) In contrast, 18-year-olds are eligable to vote, but many choose not to do so. (4) In2018, the website Duke Today published an article about low turnout among youth voters. (5) According to the article, just 16 percent of young adults cast a ballot in 2014. (6) This number must increase; it is shockingly low. (7) Young voters bear responsibility to help select their government officials. (8) These officials’ decisions on the economy, education, and health care is going to shape our lives.

What change should be made in sentence 3?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

This paragraph is from Gena’s paper on the importance of voting. Read the paragraph and look for corrections Gena needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) Voting is the basis of American democracy. (2) After becoming registered voters, many people have exercised their right to vote in every election. (3) In contrast, 18-year-olds are eligable to vote, but many choose not to do so. (4) In2018, the website Duke Today published an article about low turnout among youth voters. (5) According to the article, just 16 percent of young adults cast a ballot in 2014. (6) This number must increase; it is shockingly low. (7) Young voters bear responsibility to help select their government officials. (8) These officials’ decisions on the economy, education, and health care is going to shape our lives.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 5?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

This paragraph is from Gena’s paper on the importance of voting. Read the paragraph and look for corrections Gena needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) Voting is the basis of American democracy. (2) After becoming registered voters, many people have exercised their right to vote in every election. (3) In contrast, 18-year-olds are eligable to vote, but many choose not to do so. (4) In2018, the website Duke Today published an article about low turnout among youth voters. (5) According to the article, just 16 percent of young adults cast a ballot in 2014. (6) This number must increase; it is shockingly low. (7) Young voters bear responsibility to help select their government officials. (8) These officials’ decisions on the economy, education, and health care is going to shape our lives.

What change should be made in sentence 8?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

Greg wrote the following paper about the science involved in designing roller-coaster rides. Read Greg’s paper and look for any revisions he should make. 

                                                                                      It Takes Science

(1) Imagine being on a roller-coaster track. (2) You feel the cars slowly climbing to the top of a large hill. (3) Suddenly the roller coaster plunges steeply.(4) It bends and turns as it swiftly follows the curves of the track. (5) Happy screams fill the air as the brief but good ride comes to an end. (6) Riding on a rollercoaster may last only a few minutes. (7) Planning a new roller-coaster ride, however, takes several years. (8) Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

(9) Ride design begins with a computer program. (10) The program calculates the forces that will affect the roller-coaster cars as they move along the track. (11) Designers must understand the limits these forces create.(12) Understanding these limits helps designers when they are building and improving roller coasters. (13) Designers use their knowledge of friction, gravity, and the laws of motion to make the ride act in a way they plan. (14) This is the reason there are often large hills on roller coasters. (15) Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars descend these slopes. (16) Gravity causes the cars to increase their speed as they go down the hill.

(17) Speed alone is not enough for a fantastic roller coaster, though.(18) Designers often add loops and twists to rides. (19) However, roller coasters must be safe as well as exciting. (20) Friction and gravity are key factors in determining how far designers can push the limits of a ride. (21) Will the cars have enough speed to complete the loop? (22) On the track will the cars during an abrupt turn move too fast to stay? (23) These are questions designers must use science to answer.

(24) Another aspect designers need to consider is which material to use to build the roller coaster. (25) Steel roller coasters can be built with steeper hills than wooden roller coasters can handle. (26) Steel roller coasters are generally faster20 of 24 Set 2Grade 8, Revising than wooden ones. (27) Steel also allows wheels to ride more smoothly over a track than wood does. (28) Additionally, steel is stronger than wood. (29) Steel can withstand the forces of a car pressing against the track in tight turns and loops better than wood can. (30) By using steel, designers can create rides full of drops, twists, and loops.

(31) Even the smallest detail must be considered when building new rollercoasters. (32) Meanwhile, too much paint on a track can cause friction. (33) This is a problem because it affects the roller coaster’s speed. (34) Jeff Pike, president of Skyline Attractions, states, “The one thing that will slow down a steel coaster is a buildup on the track rails.” (35) Paint buildup causes resistance on the wheels of a roller coaster as they roll over the track. (36) A good track will have worn paint.(37) This makes the coaster move more quickly.

(38) As science and technology advance, designers are constantly searching for ways to build faster and more complex roller coasters. (39) “Everybody is going higher and taller,” says Kent Seko, a roller-coaster designer with Arrow Dynamics.(40) Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

(41) The sky is the limit when it comes to roller-coaster design. (42) Yet, one thing remains constant. (43) Science should be used to build a roller coaster.

Which word would be a more precise word to use than good in sentence 5?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

Greg wrote the following paper about the science involved in designing roller-coaster rides. Read Greg’s paper and look for any revisions he should make. 

                                                                                      It Takes Science

(1) Imagine being on a roller-coaster track. (2) You feel the cars slowly climbing to the top of a large hill. (3) Suddenly the roller coaster plunges steeply.(4) It bends and turns as it swiftly follows the curves of the track. (5) Happy screams fill the air as the brief but good ride comes to an end. (6) Riding on a rollercoaster may last only a few minutes. (7) Planning a new roller-coaster ride, however, takes several years. (8) Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

(9) Ride design begins with a computer program. (10) The program calculates the forces that will affect the roller-coaster cars as they move along the track. (11) Designers must understand the limits these forces create.(12) Understanding these limits helps designers when they are building and improving roller coasters. (13) Designers use their knowledge of friction, gravity, and the laws of motion to make the ride act in a way they plan. (14) This is the reason there are often large hills on roller coasters. (15) Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars descend these slopes. (16) Gravity causes the cars to increase their speed as they go down the hill.

(17) Speed alone is not enough for a fantastic roller coaster, though.(18) Designers often add loops and twists to rides. (19) However, roller coasters must be safe as well as exciting. (20) Friction and gravity are key factors in determining how far designers can push the limits of a ride. (21) Will the cars have enough speed to complete the loop? (22) On the track will the cars during an abrupt turn move too fast to stay? (23) These are questions designers must use science to answer.

(24) Another aspect designers need to consider is which material to use to build the roller coaster. (25) Steel roller coasters can be built with steeper hills than wooden roller coasters can handle. (26) Steel roller coasters are generally faster20 of 24 Set 2Grade 8, Revising than wooden ones. (27) Steel also allows wheels to ride more smoothly over a track than wood does. (28) Additionally, steel is stronger than wood. (29) Steel can withstand the forces of a car pressing against the track in tight turns and loops better than wood can. (30) By using steel, designers can create rides full of drops, twists, and loops.

(31) Even the smallest detail must be considered when building new rollercoasters. (32) Meanwhile, too much paint on a track can cause friction. (33) This is a problem because it affects the roller coaster’s speed. (34) Jeff Pike, president of Skyline Attractions, states, “The one thing that will slow down a steel coaster is a buildup on the track rails.” (35) Paint buildup causes resistance on the wheels of a roller coaster as they roll over the track. (36) A good track will have worn paint.(37) This makes the coaster move more quickly.

(38) As science and technology advance, designers are constantly searching for ways to build faster and more complex roller coasters. (39) “Everybody is going higher and taller,” says Kent Seko, a roller-coaster designer with Arrow Dynamics.(40) Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

(41) The sky is the limit when it comes to roller-coaster design. (42) Yet, one thing remains constant. (43) Science should be used to build a roller coaster.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

Greg wrote the following paper about the science involved in designing roller-coaster rides. Read Greg’s paper and look for any revisions he should make. 

                                                                                      It Takes Science

(1) Imagine being on a roller-coaster track. (2) You feel the cars slowly climbing to the top of a large hill. (3) Suddenly the roller coaster plunges steeply.(4) It bends and turns as it swiftly follows the curves of the track. (5) Happy screams fill the air as the brief but good ride comes to an end. (6) Riding on a rollercoaster may last only a few minutes. (7) Planning a new roller-coaster ride, however, takes several years. (8) Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

(9) Ride design begins with a computer program. (10) The program calculates the forces that will affect the roller-coaster cars as they move along the track. (11) Designers must understand the limits these forces create.(12) Understanding these limits helps designers when they are building and improving roller coasters. (13) Designers use their knowledge of friction, gravity, and the laws of motion to make the ride act in a way they plan. (14) This is the reason there are often large hills on roller coasters. (15) Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars descend these slopes. (16) Gravity causes the cars to increase their speed as they go down the hill.

(17) Speed alone is not enough for a fantastic roller coaster, though.(18) Designers often add loops and twists to rides. (19) However, roller coasters must be safe as well as exciting. (20) Friction and gravity are key factors in determining how far designers can push the limits of a ride. (21) Will the cars have enough speed to complete the loop? (22) On the track will the cars during an abrupt turn move too fast to stay? (23) These are questions designers must use science to answer.

(24) Another aspect designers need to consider is which material to use to build the roller coaster. (25) Steel roller coasters can be built with steeper hills than wooden roller coasters can handle. (26) Steel roller coasters are generally faster20 of 24 Set 2Grade 8, Revising than wooden ones. (27) Steel also allows wheels to ride more smoothly over a track than wood does. (28) Additionally, steel is stronger than wood. (29) Steel can withstand the forces of a car pressing against the track in tight turns and loops better than wood can. (30) By using steel, designers can create rides full of drops, twists, and loops.

(31) Even the smallest detail must be considered when building new rollercoasters. (32) Meanwhile, too much paint on a track can cause friction. (33) This is a problem because it affects the roller coaster’s speed. (34) Jeff Pike, president of Skyline Attractions, states, “The one thing that will slow down a steel coaster is a buildup on the track rails.” (35) Paint buildup causes resistance on the wheels of a roller coaster as they roll over the track. (36) A good track will have worn paint.(37) This makes the coaster move more quickly.

(38) As science and technology advance, designers are constantly searching for ways to build faster and more complex roller coasters. (39) “Everybody is going higher and taller,” says Kent Seko, a roller-coaster designer with Arrow Dynamics.(40) Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

(41) The sky is the limit when it comes to roller-coaster design. (42) Yet, one thing remains constant. (43) Science should be used to build a roller coaster.

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 22?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

Greg wrote the following paper about the science involved in designing roller-coaster rides. Read Greg’s paper and look for any revisions he should make. 

                                                                                      It Takes Science

(1) Imagine being on a roller-coaster track. (2) You feel the cars slowly climbing to the top of a large hill. (3) Suddenly the roller coaster plunges steeply.(4) It bends and turns as it swiftly follows the curves of the track. (5) Happy screams fill the air as the brief but good ride comes to an end. (6) Riding on a rollercoaster may last only a few minutes. (7) Planning a new roller-coaster ride, however, takes several years. (8) Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

(9) Ride design begins with a computer program. (10) The program calculates the forces that will affect the roller-coaster cars as they move along the track. (11) Designers must understand the limits these forces create.(12) Understanding these limits helps designers when they are building and improving roller coasters. (13) Designers use their knowledge of friction, gravity, and the laws of motion to make the ride act in a way they plan. (14) This is the reason there are often large hills on roller coasters. (15) Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars descend these slopes. (16) Gravity causes the cars to increase their speed as they go down the hill.

(17) Speed alone is not enough for a fantastic roller coaster, though.(18) Designers often add loops and twists to rides. (19) However, roller coasters must be safe as well as exciting. (20) Friction and gravity are key factors in determining how far designers can push the limits of a ride. (21) Will the cars have enough speed to complete the loop? (22) On the track will the cars during an abrupt turn move too fast to stay? (23) These are questions designers must use science to answer.

(24) Another aspect designers need to consider is which material to use to build the roller coaster. (25) Steel roller coasters can be built with steeper hills than wooden roller coasters can handle. (26) Steel roller coasters are generally faster20 of 24 Set 2Grade 8, Revising than wooden ones. (27) Steel also allows wheels to ride more smoothly over a track than wood does. (28) Additionally, steel is stronger than wood. (29) Steel can withstand the forces of a car pressing against the track in tight turns and loops better than wood can. (30) By using steel, designers can create rides full of drops, twists, and loops.

(31) Even the smallest detail must be considered when building new rollercoasters. (32) Meanwhile, too much paint on a track can cause friction. (33) This is a problem because it affects the roller coaster’s speed. (34) Jeff Pike, president of Skyline Attractions, states, “The one thing that will slow down a steel coaster is a buildup on the track rails.” (35) Paint buildup causes resistance on the wheels of a roller coaster as they roll over the track. (36) A good track will have worn paint.(37) This makes the coaster move more quickly.

(38) As science and technology advance, designers are constantly searching for ways to build faster and more complex roller coasters. (39) “Everybody is going higher and taller,” says Kent Seko, a roller-coaster designer with Arrow Dynamics.(40) Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

(41) The sky is the limit when it comes to roller-coaster design. (42) Yet, one thing remains constant. (43) Science should be used to build a roller coaster.

Greg has used an inappropriate transition at the beginning of sentence 32. Which transition should replace Meanwhile in this sentence?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

Greg wrote the following paper about the science involved in designing roller-coaster rides. Read Greg’s paper and look for any revisions he should make. 

                                                                                      It Takes Science

(1) Imagine being on a roller-coaster track. (2) You feel the cars slowly climbing to the top of a large hill. (3) Suddenly the roller coaster plunges steeply.(4) It bends and turns as it swiftly follows the curves of the track. (5) Happy screams fill the air as the brief but good ride comes to an end. (6) Riding on a rollercoaster may last only a few minutes. (7) Planning a new roller-coaster ride, however, takes several years. (8) Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

(9) Ride design begins with a computer program. (10) The program calculates the forces that will affect the roller-coaster cars as they move along the track. (11) Designers must understand the limits these forces create.(12) Understanding these limits helps designers when they are building and improving roller coasters. (13) Designers use their knowledge of friction, gravity, and the laws of motion to make the ride act in a way they plan. (14) This is the reason there are often large hills on roller coasters. (15) Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars descend these slopes. (16) Gravity causes the cars to increase their speed as they go down the hill.

(17) Speed alone is not enough for a fantastic roller coaster, though.(18) Designers often add loops and twists to rides. (19) However, roller coasters must be safe as well as exciting. (20) Friction and gravity are key factors in determining how far designers can push the limits of a ride. (21) Will the cars have enough speed to complete the loop? (22) On the track will the cars during an abrupt turn move too fast to stay? (23) These are questions designers must use science to answer.

(24) Another aspect designers need to consider is which material to use to build the roller coaster. (25) Steel roller coasters can be built with steeper hills than wooden roller coasters can handle. (26) Steel roller coasters are generally faster20 of 24 Set 2Grade 8, Revising than wooden ones. (27) Steel also allows wheels to ride more smoothly over a track than wood does. (28) Additionally, steel is stronger than wood. (29) Steel can withstand the forces of a car pressing against the track in tight turns and loops better than wood can. (30) By using steel, designers can create rides full of drops, twists, and loops.

(31) Even the smallest detail must be considered when building new rollercoasters. (32) Meanwhile, too much paint on a track can cause friction. (33) This is a problem because it affects the roller coaster’s speed. (34) Jeff Pike, president of Skyline Attractions, states, “The one thing that will slow down a steel coaster is a buildup on the track rails.” (35) Paint buildup causes resistance on the wheels of a roller coaster as they roll over the track. (36) A good track will have worn paint.(37) This makes the coaster move more quickly.

(38) As science and technology advance, designers are constantly searching for ways to build faster and more complex roller coasters. (39) “Everybody is going higher and taller,” says Kent Seko, a roller-coaster designer with Arrow Dynamics.(40) Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

(41) The sky is the limit when it comes to roller-coaster design. (42) Yet, one thing remains constant. (43) Science should be used to build a roller coaster.

Greg would like to provide additional support for the idea he has presented in sentence 38. Which sentence BEST follows and supports sentence 38?

Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. 

Greg wrote the following paper about the science involved in designing roller-coaster rides. Read Greg’s paper and look for any revisions he should make. 

                                                                                      It Takes Science

(1) Imagine being on a roller-coaster track. (2) You feel the cars slowly climbing to the top of a large hill. (3) Suddenly the roller coaster plunges steeply.(4) It bends and turns as it swiftly follows the curves of the track. (5) Happy screams fill the air as the brief but good ride comes to an end. (6) Riding on a rollercoaster may last only a few minutes. (7) Planning a new roller-coaster ride, however, takes several years. (8) Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

(9) Ride design begins with a computer program. (10) The program calculates the forces that will affect the roller-coaster cars as they move along the track. (11) Designers must understand the limits these forces create.(12) Understanding these limits helps designers when they are building and improving roller coasters. (13) Designers use their knowledge of friction, gravity, and the laws of motion to make the ride act in a way they plan. (14) This is the reason there are often large hills on roller coasters. (15) Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars descend these slopes. (16) Gravity causes the cars to increase their speed as they go down the hill.

(17) Speed alone is not enough for a fantastic roller coaster, though.(18) Designers often add loops and twists to rides. (19) However, roller coasters must be safe as well as exciting. (20) Friction and gravity are key factors in determining how far designers can push the limits of a ride. (21) Will the cars have enough speed to complete the loop? (22) On the track will the cars during an abrupt turn move too fast to stay? (23) These are questions designers must use science to answer.

(24) Another aspect designers need to consider is which material to use to build the roller coaster. (25) Steel roller coasters can be built with steeper hills than wooden roller coasters can handle. (26) Steel roller coasters are generally faster20 of 24 Set 2Grade 8, Revising than wooden ones. (27) Steel also allows wheels to ride more smoothly over a track than wood does. (28) Additionally, steel is stronger than wood. (29) Steel can withstand the forces of a car pressing against the track in tight turns and loops better than wood can. (30) By using steel, designers can create rides full of drops, twists, and loops.

(31) Even the smallest detail must be considered when building new rollercoasters. (32) Meanwhile, too much paint on a track can cause friction. (33) This is a problem because it affects the roller coaster’s speed. (34) Jeff Pike, president of Skyline Attractions, states, “The one thing that will slow down a steel coaster is a buildup on the track rails.” (35) Paint buildup causes resistance on the wheels of a roller coaster as they roll over the track. (36) A good track will have worn paint.(37) This makes the coaster move more quickly.

(38) As science and technology advance, designers are constantly searching for ways to build faster and more complex roller coasters. (39) “Everybody is going higher and taller,” says Kent Seko, a roller-coaster designer with Arrow Dynamics.(40) Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

(41) The sky is the limit when it comes to roller-coaster design. (42) Yet, one thing remains constant. (43) Science should be used to build a roller coaster.

Greg wants to improve the conclusion of his paper. Which sentence should replace sentence 43 to bring his paper to a more effective conclusion?