Vague Pronouns

1. Read this paragraph: 

(1) John and Devon have been best friends since they were in primary school. (2) The young men always played football together, and they take turns on offense and defense. (3) Outside of school, he is also an excellent student that excels in mathematics and science. (4) Both anticipate that they will be able to attend the University of Texas. 

Which sentence should be revised to correct a vague pronoun? 

2-Read this paragraph: 

(1) Diane was excellent in mathematics, but she struggled with writing. (2) Her middle school papers showed little revision between drafts. (3) Unfortunately, that often lowered her grade below expectations. (4) If only Diane focused on editing, her teacher would mark Diane's papers more favorably. 

Which sentence should be revised to correct a vague pronoun?

3 -Read this paragraph: 

(1) Max and Linda swerved out of control while they rode a motorcycle together on Saturday. (2) Although the motorcycle hit the tree, it was not damaged. (3) He is normally a safe driver, but Linda fell off the back and suffered minor scrapes and bruises in the motorcycle accident. (4) There is a chance Max will have his license suspended after this incident. 

Which sentence should be revised to correct a vague pronoun? 

4. Read this paragraph: 

(1) I don't think they should show violence in video games made for teenagers. (2) It is possible that many young men and women could become immune to the negative psychological effects. (3) They are too young to process the experience at such a young age. (4) After the teenagers become adults, they can choose to play violent games or not. 

Which sentence should be revised to correct a vague pronoun? 

5. Read this paragraph: 

(1) Bill and David are preparing for that difficult test known as the SHSAT. (2) They are trading study tips and working hard like many others in their class. (3) The fall exam is coming soon, which is stressful for many students. (4) However, those that prepare for the exam are likely to excel. 

Which sentence should be revised to correct a vague pronoun? 

6. Read this paragraph: 

(1) If every young student puts this sheet in a notebook and refers to it every day, then he or she will be better prepared for the SHSAT. (2) Too many students fail to read the latest DOE handbook and take its advice. (3) Their scores could improve if they carefully followed the tips and suggestions in the book. (4) Nevertheless, the majority of students think they do not need that outside help or advice. 

Which sentence should be revised to correct a vague pronoun? 

7. Read this sentence: 

The parent gave the lovely and well-behaved child her treat. 

Which edit should be made to correct this sentence? 

8. Read this sentence: 

All the people in the neighborhood like to hold block parties on the Fourth of July, even though they will carry on all day and restrict access to the street. 

Which edit should be made to correct this sentence? 

9. Read this sentence: 

As the consumer approached the salesperson, who was looking for customers to help, she said, "Hello." 

Which edit should be made to correct this sentence?