This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined to separate from Great Britain and form their own nation.

This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined because they separated from Great Britain and formed their own nation.

This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined, who wanted to separate from Great Britain and form their own nation.

This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined separating from Great Britain and forming their own nation.

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Because it's astounding to me, Texas has one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

It's astounding to me what Texas has being one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

As astounding as it is, it's also shocking that Texas has one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

It's astounding to me that Texas has one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

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Amy Cuddy did a study on how "power poses" affect people she is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

Amy Cuddy did a study, at Harvard University and with a social psychologist, on how "power poses" affect people.

Amy Cuddy, a social psychologist at Harvard University, did a study on how "power poses" affect people.

Amy Cuddy did a study on how "power poses" affect people, a social psychologist at Harvard University.

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She found that while the people were holding their body in a position of power, the hormones associated with dominance and stress were increased and decreased.

She found that the people holding their body in a position of power had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance, the hormone associated with stress was decreased.

She found that the people had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance and a decrease in the hormone associated with stress who were holding their body in a position of power.

She found that the people holding their body in a position of power had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance and a decrease in the hormone associated with stress.

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But online networking promotes short, superficial connections with teens today, which it is very popular.

But online networking promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

But online networking that promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

But online networking, which is very popular with teens today, promotes short, superficial connections.

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Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

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