Question 1

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 10 and 11?

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This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined to separate from Great Britain and form their own nation.

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This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined because they separated from Great Britain and formed their own nation.

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This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined, who wanted to separate from Great Britain and form their own nation.

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This idea of taxation without representation is part of the reason our forefathers were determined separating from Great Britain and forming their own nation.

Question 2

Damian would like to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 14. Which of the following is the best replacement for 'Therefore'?

Accepted Answer

For example

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Meanwhile

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Furthermore

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However

Question 3

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21?

Accepted Answer

It's astounding to me that Texas has one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

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Because it's astounding to me, Texas has one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

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It's astounding to me what Texas has being one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

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As astounding as it is, it's also shocking that Texas has one of the lowest voter turnout rates in the United States.

Question 4

The meaning of sentence 23 is unclear. What is the most effective way to clarify the meaning of this sentence?

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Change 'them' to 'those important decisions'

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Change 'population' to 'citizenry'

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Change 'sometimes' to 'there are times when'

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Change 'chooses' to 'selects'

Question 5

Katy wants to use a more appropriate word than 'questions' in sentence 23. Which of these could best replace the word 'questions'?

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challenges

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points

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curiosities

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landmarks

Question 6

What change is needed in sentence 9?

Accepted Answer

Change 'to old' to 'too old'

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Change 'cheeks' to 'cheek's'

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Delete 'Although'

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Delete the comma

Question 7

What change needs to be made in sentence 15?

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Change 'it' to 'them'

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Change 'become' to 'became'

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Change 'they're' to 'their'

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Delete 'so'

Question 8

What change needs to be made in sentence 21?

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Change 'affects' to 'effects'

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Change 'lives' to 'lifes'

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Delete the comma after 'work'

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Change 'is dangerous' to 'are dangerous'

Question 9

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

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Amy Cuddy, a social psychologist at Harvard University, did a study on how "power poses" affect people.

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Amy Cuddy did a study on how "power poses" affect people she is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

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Amy Cuddy did a study, at Harvard University and with a social psychologist, on how "power poses" affect people.

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Amy Cuddy did a study on how "power poses" affect people, a social psychologist at Harvard University.

Question 10

The word 'opposed' is not the best choice for sentence 19. Which word should replace 'opposed' in this sentence?

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contrasted

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measured

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varied

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differed

Question 11

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 20?

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She found that the people holding their body in a position of power had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance and a decrease in the hormone associated with stress.

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She found that while the people were holding their body in a position of power, the hormones associated with dominance and stress were increased and decreased.

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She found that the people holding their body in a position of power had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance, the hormone associated with stress was decreased.

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She found that the people had an increase in the hormone associated with dominance and a decrease in the hormone associated with stress who were holding their body in a position of power.

Question 12

There is a redundant sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 11-21). Which of these sentences unnecessarily repeats information and should be deleted?

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Sentence 15

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Sentence 18

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Sentence 14

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Sentence 21

Question 13

Simon has used an ineffective transition in sentence 3. Which word or phrase could best replace 'On the other hand' in this sentence?

Accepted Answer

As a result

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Similarly

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In the end

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Specifically

Question 14

How should sentence 12 be changed?

Accepted Answer

Change 'it' to 'them'

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Delete the comma after 'cool'

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Change 'fascinated' to 'fasinated'

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Change 'had never pursued' to 'hadn't never pursued'

Question 15

How should sentence 38 be changed?

Accepted Answer

Change 'advise' to 'advice'

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Sentence 38 should not be changed.

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Change the comma to a semicolon

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Change 'admired' to 'admirred'

Question 16

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 53?

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Change 'past' to 'passed'

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Make no change

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Delete 'and'

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Change 'resumed' to 'resummed'

Question 17

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 3 and 4?

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But online networking, which is very popular with teens today, promotes short, superficial connections.

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But online networking promotes short, superficial connections with teens today, which it is very popular.

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But online networking promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

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But online networking that promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

Question 18

How can Susan improve the clarity of sentence 12?

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Change 'they' to 'researchers'

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Change 'a while' to 'some time'

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Change 'these teens' to 'they'

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Change 'suggesting' to 'saying'

Question 19

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 16?

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Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

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Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

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Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

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Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

Question 20

Anika has not used the most effective transition in sentence 8. Which of the following should replace 'After all' in this sentence?

Accepted Answer

Soon

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Otherwise

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Instead

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Finally

Question 21

How should sentence 20 be revised?

Accepted Answer

To enhance their surroundings, some people install fake windows with decorative drapes.

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To enhance their surroundings, fake windows with decorative drapes are installed by some people to help them.

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To enhance their surroundings, some people install fake windows and they also use decorative drapes.

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To enhance their surroundings, installing fake windows and decorative drapes helped some people

Question 22

How should sentence 5 be changed?

Accepted Answer

Change 'you' to 'they'

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Change 'were written' to 'was written'

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Change 'years' to 'year's'

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Change 'explore' to 'explored'

Question 23

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?

Accepted Answer

Change 'safe' to 'safely'

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Change 'confident' to 'confidant'

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No change needs to be made in this sentence.

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Change 'explained' to 'explains'

Question 24

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

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Afterward Grady became upset and ran toward the nearest source of light, probably thinking it was an exit from the barn.

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Afterward Grady, who became upset and ran toward the nearest source of light, probably thought it was an exit from the barn.

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Afterward Grady became upset and ran toward the nearest source of light, she probably thought it was an exit from the barn.

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Afterward Grady became upset because she probably thought it was an exit from the barn and ran toward the nearest source of light.

Question 25

Sentence 12 lacks clarity. What is the best way to improve this sentence?

Accepted Answer

Change 'peered' to 'glanced'

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Change 'they saw' to 'he saw'

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Change 'When they' to 'When Mach and the veterinarian'

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Change 'looking out' to 'staring'

Question 26

Xavier would like to improve the closing paragraph (sentences 27-32) by replacing sentence 32. Which of the following could best replace sentence 32 and help strengthen this paper's closing?

Accepted Answer

For the rest of her life, Grady lived on Mach's farm.

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It was the unique tale of a cow's rescue, but it was also an inspiring story of American ingenuity and determination.

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In fact, as you can tell, I'm telling the story of this magnificent and unusual cow even now!

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Grady the cow had been such an unassuming animal.

Question 27

Brianna has not used the most effective transition in sentence 10. Read the second paragraph (sentences 4-13) again. Which transition should replace the word 'Instead' in sentence 10?

Accepted Answer

Additionally

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Finally

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Incidentally

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However

Question 28

Which sentence below would best follow and support sentence 15?

Accepted Answer

Sun exposure can be life threatening to people who have lighter skin, but everyone should learn to be cautious in the sun.

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So teens must learn to avoid tanning beds, but they must also learn to stay out of the sun during the summer.

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There are many ways to achieve this goal that teens will surely want to investigate.

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Adequate protection is vital because just one blistering sunburn in childhood or adolescence greatly increases a person's risk of developing melanoma later in life.

Question 29

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 24?

Accepted Answer

Although few moles actually develop into melanoma, only an expert can determine whether a person is at risk and is carefully examining cells from the suspicious mole under a microscope.

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Although few moles actually develop into melanoma, only an expert can determine whether a person is at risk by carefully examining cells from the suspicious mole under a microscope.

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Although few moles actually develop into melanoma, only an expert under a microscope can determine whether a person is at risk by carefully examining cells from the suspicious mole.

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No revision is needed in sentence 24.

Question 30

Brianna is not pleased with the way she has closed her paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 28 and more effectively close this paper?

Accepted Answer

Everyone is doing it now, so join the crowd and protect yourself.

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It's time to reduce your exposure, even if you don't want to.

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In closing, it's important that you make changes so that you won't get melanoma.

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Take action now to protect your skin and avoid this life-threatening disease later.

Question 31

What change should be made in sentence 15?

Accepted Answer

Insert a comma after 'Buntline'

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Change 'made' to 'making'

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Change 'their' to 'his'

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No change should be made.

Question 32

What is the correct way to write sentences 30 and 31?

Accepted Answer

The sentences are written correctly in the paper

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The Wild West Show disbanded just before World War I, at that time it was declared the most successful traveling show of all time.

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The Wild West Show disbanded just before World War I. Having been declared the most successful traveling show of all time.

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When the Wild West Show disbanded just before World War I, it was declared the most successful traveling show of all time.

Question 33

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 5?

Accepted Answer

It's easy to snap a photo, load it on a website, and type out a quick synopsis of where they are and what they're doing.

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It's easy to snap a photo that loads it on a website to type a synopsis of where they are and what they're doing.

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No revision is needed in this sentence.

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It's easy to snap a photo and load it on a website, then a quick synopsis is typed out of where they are and what they're doing.

Question 34

Sentence 8 contains an indefinite reference that affects the clarity of the sentence. What is the best way to revise this sentence?

Accepted Answer

Change 'he' to 'a boy'

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Change 'that' to 'some'

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Change 'them' to 'him'

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Change 'someone' to 'a person'

Question 35

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21?

Accepted Answer

Remember that who you become later, both in real life and online, is directly related to the decisions you make today!

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Sentence 21 does not need to be revised.

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Who you become later, it is directly related both in real life and online to the decisions you make today!

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Both in real life and online, remember that who you become later and the decisions you make today are directly related!

Question 36

In sentence 5, 'awesome' is not the most effective word to use. Which of the following could replace 'awesome' in this sentence?

Accepted Answer

extreme

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brooding

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breathtaking

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decisive

Question 37

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

Accepted Answer

After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, he reached his target altitude, where he ran through an extensive checklist.

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After a two-and-a-half-hour trip, he reached his target altitude, then he ran through an extensive checklist.

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After a two-and-a-half-hour trip where he ran through an extensive checklist, he reached his target altitude.

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After a two-and-a-half-hour trip and after he reached his target altitude, he then ran through an extensive checklist.

Question 38

There is a redundant sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 11-18). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

Accepted Answer

Sentence 12

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Sentence 13

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Sentence 15

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Sentence 14

Question 39

Catherine has not used an appropriate transition in sentence 21. Which of these could best replace 'However' and create a more appropriate transition between sentences 20 and 21?

Accepted Answer

For example

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Coincidentally

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Meanwhile

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Likewise

Question 40

What change needs to be made in sentence 10?

Accepted Answer

Change 'harmless' to 'harmlessly'

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Change the comma after 'water' to a semicolon

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Change 'shrieked' to 'shreiked'

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Insert quotation marks at the end of the sentence

Question 41

What change should be made in sentence 21?

Accepted Answer

Change 'past' to 'passed'

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Change 'they' to 'it'

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Change 'stood' to 'standing'

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Delete the semicolon

Question 42

The meaning of sentence 4 is unclear. Byron can improve the clarity of this sentence by changing 'it' to -

Accepted Answer

the magnificent city

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the famous Trojans

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the extreme wealth

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the historical record

Question 43

There is a redundant sentence in the last paragraph (sentences 23-28). Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph?

Accepted Answer

Sentence 24

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Sentence 25

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Sentence 26

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Sentence 27

Question 44

In sentence 5, the word 'trip' is not the appropriate word to use. Which of the following should replace 'trip' in this sentence?

Accepted Answer

process

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journey

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operation

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standard

Question 45

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21?

Accepted Answer

These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and patiently wait for the perfect wave.

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Sentence 21 does not need to be revised.

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These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it because of the perfect wave they patiently wait for.

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These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it, they patiently wait for the perfect wave.

Question 46

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 30?

Accepted Answer

With more than 500 miles of coastline, Texas offers ample opportunity for people to surf right here in their home state.

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With more than 500 miles of coastline, people in their home state are offered ample opportunity to surf right here in Texas.

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With more than 500 miles of coastline, there is ample opportunity for people to surf right here in their home state and in Texas.

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With more than 500 miles of coastline, ample opportunity is offered for people in Texas to surf right here in their home state.

Question 47

What change should be made in sentence 8?

Accepted Answer

Change 'me' to 'I'

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Insert a comma after 'together'

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No change should be made.

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Change 'decided' to 'decide'

Question 48

What change should be made in sentence 3?

Accepted Answer

Change 'it' to 'them'

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Change 'teenagers' to 'teenager's'

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Change 'sentiments' to 'sentaments'

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No change should be made.

Question 49

What change should be made in sentence 21?

Accepted Answer

Change 'societies' to 'society's'

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Delete the comma

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Change 'woman's' to 'womans''

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No change should be made in sentence 21.

Question 50

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 12?

Accepted Answer

Realizing that she hadn't recovered from her previous race, she slowed her pace to a jog.

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Realizing that she hadn't recovered from her previous race, a jog was all she could slow her pace to.

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She realized that she hadn't recovered from her previous race, her pace slowed to a jog.

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She realized that she hadn't recovered from the pace of her previous race, which slowed to a jog.

Question 51

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 6?

Accepted Answer

Each day the penguins leave their burrows and head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.

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Each day the penguins head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding, leaving their burrows.

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Each day the penguins leave their burrows they head out to sea to spend the day swimming and feeding.

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Each day the penguins that leave their burrows head out to sea for spending the day swimming and feeding.

Question 52

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 9 and 10?

Accepted Answer

While attempting to groom themselves, some penguins swallowed the toxic oil and died.

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Some penguins would try to groom themselves because they swallowed the toxic oil and died.

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Attempting to groom themselves were some penguins, who swallowed the toxic oil and died.

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Some penguins would try to groom themselves, they swallowed the toxic oil and died.

Question 53

What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 17?

Accepted Answer

As a result

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However

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Furthermore

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For example

Question 54

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?

Accepted Answer

Change 'then' to 'than'

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Change 'presidential' to 'Presidential'

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Change the comma after 'election' to a semicolon

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No change should be made in sentence 4.

Question 55

What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 6?

Accepted Answer

However

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Even though

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In contrast

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Furthermore

Question 56

Kelly has not used the most appropriate word in sentence 17. Which word best replaces 'changes'?

Accepted Answer

decreases

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shifts

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controls

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varies

Question 57

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 15?

Accepted Answer

Strolling through the clear shaft, visitors are surrounded by fish on their left, on their right, and over their heads.

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D Sentence 15 should not be revised.

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Visitors are surrounded by fish strolling through the clear shaft on their left, on their right, and over their heads.

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On their left, on their right, and over their heads, fish are surrounded by visitors strolling through the clear shaft.

Question 58

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 2?

Accepted Answer

They enjoyed playing video games, bowling, and watching movies together.

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They enjoyed playing video games, while they also enjoyed movie watching and bowling.

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They enjoyed playing video games and watched movies together and bowling.

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They enjoyed playing video games, they bowled and watched movies together.

Question 59

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

Accepted Answer

He used a wheelchair to get around and communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.

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He used a wheelchair to get around, he communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.

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He used a wheelchair to get around, which communicated through a sophisticated computer system that responded to his eye movements.

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Using a wheelchair to get around and communicating through a sophisticated computer system, he responded to his eye movements.

Question 60

What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 18?

Accepted Answer

However

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Consequently

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In fact

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In the end

Question 61

The meaning of sentence 22 is unclear. What is the most effective way to clarify the meaning of this sentence?

Accepted Answer

Change 'them' to 'some analysts'

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Change 'This' to 'It'

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Change 'main' to 'primary'

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Change 'water' to 'it'

Question 62

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 26?

Accepted Answer

Over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.

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The turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day, this was over a period of six months

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Because it had been over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.

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It had been over a period of six months, the turbine produced up to 211 gallons of water per day.

Question 63

What change should be made in sentence 2?

Accepted Answer

Delete 'hardly'

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Change 'placed' to 'places'

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Change the comma to a period

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No change should be made in sentence 2.

Question 64

What change should be made in sentence 29?

Accepted Answer

Change 'it' to 'them'

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Change 'use' to 'using'

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Change 'come' to 'came'

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Delete 'and'

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